It's a definite start
Pros: Instrumentals (incredible), Overall vocal style (reminds me of a female Kurt Cobain, if that makes any sense), Song structure (very well layered)
Cons: Lyrics (this is the only part of the song I actually dislike, the lyrics are rather bland with no symbolism or deep meaning; if grunge is your influence then you can look at some lyrics for Skinny Puppy and Nirvana and see how powerful and intense the lyrics are; you don't have to be a great writer to write good lyrics, just takes inspiration), Yelling vocals (the vocals are great up until the parts where you yell; while they're not awful or even bad they could definitely use some work, you kind of talk yell like people do when listening to music and they decide to sing along)
Overall song was really good. I hope to see more from you in the future because you definitely have some talent here.